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Dear Camilla.

I must write to you. You know I run away from home.
On the way i meet a boy named mark, he was so sweeth
with dark curly hair and dark-flashing eyes, and he was tall and strong looking - I have never meet a
boy like him... I can not describe what he look like, but he looks like a mix of your x-boy
friend and Justin Timberlake you know... the singer.
It was a romantic day he was coming over the ????brude???? to me, carring the most enormous ???grinned??? at me...
Later he just kissed my on my mouth, i was totally sold!
I know it bit a little strange that a complety stranger guy come and kiss me... but there is something with
him... we have talk a lot so i know him better now.
I still love him after what he had done... It was not his fail.. also me and mark took with a car, the man in
the car was ????lecherous???? and ugly.. I think we should to London.. i mean... but were going to Bristol...
First i think he had played a trick with me... but I have now forgive him But we are now long from
each other. I took to London and Mark is still in Bristol... I miss him and i miss you so much.. you are
my best friend.
I still talk to Mark over the phone and i write letters to him..

I have it great in London i lived together with a few of young people they are all sweet yo me. I will call
you soon.

Yours
Jan

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???Word??? er ord jeg ikke helt forstår hvad de mener med det.

Vh. Thomas Nielsen

I must write you (gætter jeg på der menes her?).

You know I ran away from home.

On the way (kunne måske rettes til road) I met a boy named Mark.

I have never met a boy like him

he look like a mixture of your ex-boyfriend and....

he was coming over over the brude (her aner jeg ikke, hvad der menes)

wearing the biggest grin

I still love him in spite of what he has done

it was not his fault

lecherous (igle-agtig eller hvad?) - he was a leech and he was ugly

I think we were going to London - eller - I thought we were going to London - alt efter hvad der menes her?

played a trick on me

but I have forgiven him now

I went to London and Mark is still...

I had a great time i London

they were all sweet to me



..det var et par af de ting jeg faldt over, men det ser ud som om der rodes lidt runt i tiderne :)

he look like a mixture of your ex-boyfriend and.... "look" skal lige rettes til "looks"

Håber ikke det er ret meget over 7. klasse?  ;o)

Dear Camilla.

I must write to you. As you know, I have run away from home. On the way I met a boy/guy named Mark. He was so sweet with dark curly hair and dark-flashing eyes, and he was tall and strong looking - I have never met a boy/guy like him...  I can't describe his apperance very well - but he looks like a mix of your ex-boyfriend and Justin Timberlake - The singer you know. It was a romantic day as he was coming over ( what?? ) to my place (??) with (what???)  . After a while he gave me a big (?) kiss directly on my mouth. I was like struck by lightning (du kan ikke bruge sold - indforstået dansk). I know it is a bit strange that a perfect stranger just walks over and kisses me - but there is something about him. We have talked a lot, so I know him better now. I still love him after all he has done (?? mening ??) It was not his fault. Me and Mark were also in the car (?? mening ??), the man in the car vas lecherous and ugly. I the we should have gone to (?? mening ??)  First iI think he played a trick on me (?? hvem ??)  (?? mangler noget ??)  but I have now forgiven him. But we are now so far apart. I went to London and Mark is still in Bristol. I miss him and I miss you som much. You are my best friend. I still talk to Mark on phone, and I write letters to him. I am having a great time in London. I am staying with some other young people and they are realy nice to me. I will call you soon. Yours truly Jan

Dear Camilla.

I must write to you. As you know, I have run away from home. On the way I met a guy named Mark. He was so sweet with dark curly hair and dark-flashing eyes, and he was tall and strong looking - I have never met a guy like him... I can't describe his appearance very well - but he looks like a mix of your ex-boyfriend and Justin Timberlake - The singer you know.
  It was a romantic day as he was coming over the bridge where I standing. We talk a little and After a while he gave me a big softy kiss directly on my mouth.  I was like struck by lightning. I know it is a bit strange that a perfect stranger just walks over and kisses me - but there is something about him. We have talked a lot, so I know him better now.
I still love him after all he has done let me explain: It was not his fault. Me and Mark discuss... Mark want me with him home to Bristol but I could not... I say to him that is what very imported to come to London.. He was sweet and listen to me...
  After a little time stop me and Mark a truck, The man in the truck was lecherous and ugly because he took at me.... Mark said that we should to London, but the truck driver droved us to Bristol.... First I think Mark played a trick on me… and I hate him ... but I have now forgiven him.   
  Now we so far apart. I went to London and Mark is still in Bristol. I miss him and I miss you so much. You are my best friend.
  I still talk to Mark on phone, and I write letters to him. I am having a great time in London. I am staying with some other young people and they are really nice to me. I will call you soon.

Yours truly
Jan

Han har lavet stilen om, er dette bedre? hvad skal evt. laves om nu!

mange tak for hjælpen!

Og i skal nok få point :-)

Dear Camilla.

I must write you. As you know, I have run away from home. On the way I met a guy named Mark. He was so sweet with dark curly hair and dark-flashing eyes, and he was tall and strong looking - I have never met a guy like him... I can't describe his appearance very well - but he looks like a mix of your ex-boyfriend and Justin Timberlake - The singer you know.
  It was a romantic day as he was coming over the bridge where I was standing. We talked a little and After a while he gave me a big soft kiss directly on my mouth.  I was like struck by lightning. I know it is a bit strange that a perfect stranger just walks over and kisses me - but there is something about him. We have talked a lot, so I know him better now.
I still love him after all he has done, let me explain: It was not his fault. Me and Mark discussed... Mark wanted me to come home to Bristol with him, but I could not... I said to him that is what very important for me to go to London.. He was sweet and listened to me...
  After a little while Mark and me stopped a truck, The man in the truck was lecherous and ugly because he fondled me.... Mark said that we were going to London, but the truck driver drove us to Bristol.... First I thought Mark played a trick on me… and I hated him ... but I have forgiven him now.   
  Now we are so far apart. I went to London and Mark is still in Bristol. I miss him and I miss you so much. You are my best friend.
  I still talk to Mark on phone, and I write letters to him. I am having a great time in London. I am staying with some other young people and they are really nice to me. I will call you soon.

Yours truly
Jan


:)

korrektion:

I said to him that is what very important for me to go to London..

skulle være:

I said to him that is was very important for me to go to London..

i må meget undskylde at i ikke har fået point før nu! Jeg havde glemt det.
Min lillebror fik 11 for hans stil, ikke en eneste stavefejl! Mange mange tak!