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More young people become self starters

Many school leavers now see self-employment as a means of controlling their destinies. But is it the right way in such a young age to be a self starter? There are a lot of things, which can make it to a bad experience. I think it is okay to start a company, but I also mean the young boys and girls must have an education they can go back too, if they go bankrupt.

I will now look on the advantages and disadvantages to be a self starter:
Advantages: You got all the profit your self, you can make your own working plan, to have success you must work hard, you have freedom to do what ever you want, and if you make a big company with a success you maybe can sell it and make extra money this way.

Disadvantages: You bet everything your own, lost some friends because of the working time, tiered in the afternoon your family must be sad because you are never home and do not have time with them,  you do not have the freedom to do things with your family and friends.

You must be very secure on what way you would like to go, you must have the right product and all time come with new ideas to make your business better. I can se my self as a self starter because I like to buy and sell on the internet, but I do not want to skip school to starting my own business right now. I must have more experience inside buying and selling on the internet. I must learn all the tax and buying rules so I do not get a fine.

My conclusion is that young people must have an education before they start there own company. There are a lot of opportunities to make a good and a bad firm. They must have the right idea on the right moment so other does not have to make the same thing as you. You must also have a good capital in the start because there are a lot of regular outlays you do not think about when you start the firm. You must have some good contacts with suppliers who can send the things to you at the right time. So your customers does not have to wait on there goods.